response to Koosmann’s intro and conclusion December 10, 2007

I really liked your intro it was detailed and really told what your paper was going to be about. But, you need something at the beginning that will catch attention. Maybe a quote or a story that will draw readers in. The conclusion was also good. You do a good job of stating what your paper was about, this is something I struggle with. You didn’t restate your intro which is good.